the great walnut branch
torn by wind, brought down by weight
rests like a dead horse
Greg, when did it come down? I saw it yesterday, but I wasn’t aware of any strong winds. Did it just randomly fall?
Tuesday mid-afternoon when we came home it was like that. I assume the windstorm a month ago weakened it (it was already rotten-hollow) and it just took some time to tear the rest of the way loose.
Just playing around with other ideas:
massive walnut branch
falls unnoticed –
did it make a sound?
dog days –
huge tree branch
separates from bark
crushed grass –
large tree branch
rests on its shadow
I might note that my second attempt would earn me a “C” in the haiku community: an “A” for the kigo (season words) in the first line, and an “F” for the pun.
I like the third one, Bryon. It compels the imagination. Somehow that “rests on its shadow” takes my mind to the startling position of the branch. It’s closer to what I’ve been looking for than anything I’ve found.
Greg said something the other day about Haikus not actually being as restrictive in number of syllables as we all were taught. So this is a combination of all my favorite parts:
Massive walnut branch
Resting like a dead horse
On its shadow.
I doubt it can be a haiku if it has 4 lines, but this what I like anyway! :-)
What the heck, I like it too! Restrictions are made to be escaped.
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