scratched on the winter wooded hill
with the brush handle
This is a lovely image, especially “softly wooded hill.” And it’s a nice, sharp contrast with “scratched.” All those “s” sounds come to life when it’s read aloud.
I just changed it to “winter wooded hill.” Hope that’s okay. It clarifies that the leaves are off the trees, and I liked the bonus of the alliteration that imitates wind in bare branches.
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